Final Script Evaluation

Final Script Evaluation

Now that I have finished my script I feel that my final script was a success. I took on board what Deborah - The lady from the National Theatre - said about the further developments that I could make to to my second draft. After our discussion I then wrong a scene about the character Emma having a private dance lesson and she is exhausted and isn't able to perform properly and keep up with the physical stress of dancing. Emma's mother is then pushing her to keep going and stop being silly and insisting that Emma is fine. There is a conversation between Megan who is taking the private lesson and Sharon - Emma's mum - about Emma's condition that she is getting thinner and that she isn't well and Sharon is being defensive and denying all knowledge that she knows of her daughter's health. 

Megan: I am concerned about Emma Sharon

Sharon: Why?

Megan: Did you not just see how she was then? The poor girl is exhausted, and no wonders because she hasn’t eaten all day.

Sharon: Well that’s not my fault?

I have also added another scene where I have given Emma a monologue looking in the mirror looking at how thin she is becoming and talking about the stress that her mother is causing her.  

"I thought well, maybe if I started getting thinner my mum would see, and see that this entire dance thing is killing me and making me ill. I can’t do it anymore I really can’t."

I feel that those 2 scenes are working really well in my script and fills the gaps and gives the script a better flow. It also makes it longer to reach the length the play should be and a final important note is that it gives the script more detail and goes more in depth for the characters Emma, Sharon and Megan. Which I feel has really enhanced Megan's character with an extra scene that she is involved with and also it has gone into more depth of Emma's struggle. 
Another element that has worked with my script is that I have looked over all of the dialogue and proof read it all and made sure that it all makes complete sense and that the language used isn't superficial. I really wanted the language to be natural and not forced and written in a way that people wouldn't speak. 
Lastly I feel that all of the main characters (Alice, Danielle, Megan, Phil, Emma & Sharon) have a good character built and all have good story line. I feel that they all have a purpose within the story and all have the one thing that links them - The dance school. 

Things that I would have liked to develop in the script further would be to state music and sound effect choices in the stage directions as I only stated one specific song in the dancing scene. I would also like to have included lighting choices as well and give specific washes and colours as the only lighting choices I have made is discussed where on the stage some people will be placed and if its a split scene with 3 people in the same location then i stated I would like the stage split in either 2 or 3 parts. I would also like to have included more stage directions for the actors and the way they would portray lines and where on the stage they should enter and exit. I included the location of where some of the scenes were based however I feel there could have been more detail given about the scene changes, lighting choices, stage directions and sound choices. 

I feel that I have achieved what I set out to do. I am proud that I have managed to write a whole play and that the content is relatable to my personal experience of what I witnessed being at a dance school. All of the dilemmas in the play are all dealt with and I don't feel that there are any loose ends to the play as all scenes are complete and all dialogue is finalized and finished and it isn't rough. I have enjoyed this challenge of writing a play as it is a skill that I can take with me and say that I have done and has been a challenge and a task to take on.